Six Sentence Sunday
Osiyo~
It’s Six Sentence Sunday where I join tons of other writers, whose links you will find by clicking on the logo above or on the site name, to thrill, tantalize and tickle your fancy with a tiny sample of something we’re working on, or that’s already published. I decided to go with a few lines from Back to the Way We Were, my short cowboy story.
I hope you enjoy a blip from this reunion story. This is when the main characters first meet again. At this point Haley has said exactly one word to Nick, before he’s even seen her face, hidden under a floppy hat. This is his reaction to that word, a voice he’s never forgotten–good or bad–over the years apart.
Husky and soft, her voice dug into his head and dragged across his memories like sand paper over raw skin. Suddenly he knew the color of her hair, the shape of her body. He knew the exact shade of green of her eyes. If he didnโt say her name, refused to acknowledge who she was, would he be able to wake from the dream in which he suddenly found himself? Hell no. That would be too simple, and nothing about Kyley Carter was ever easy.
I look forward to sharing more of this story next week!
Dodadagohvi~
Posted on 04/15/2012, in Blogs, my writing, progress, Promotion, Six Sentence Sunday and tagged Back to the Way We Were, Calisa Rhose, novella, Pen of the Dreamer, Writing. Bookmark the permalink. 30 Comments.
I love the reaction. It sounds believable and like just the kind of thing that will lead to all sorts of romantic tension! I’d love to read more!
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You will want to tune in next Sunday then! Thanks for stopping in, Jess. ๐
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Love his POV, Calisa! This one sounds like a good one!
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That is my hope, Silver. ๐ Thank you.
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Love the imagery! Can’t wait for next week.
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I’m hoping you gals will see this and more very soon, Ally! ๐
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Oooh! Great lines! …dragged across his memories like sand paper… Loved it!
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Lol Glad you liked it, Ceri! ๐
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Love his reaction! Sets up a great tension already. Great six!
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It’s just the beginning. lol Thanks for commenting, Cherie!
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Awesome description and six! Loved it!
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I loved yours, too, Jennifer! Glad you came over. ๐
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That guy doesn’t stand a chance! Now I’m wondering what that one word was … ?
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Nope. Not a chance. It was actually two words (my slip there)- since when… Thanks for dropping in, Stephanie!
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Wonderful six! I love your turn of phrase and how much detail he remembers of her.
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Some things a man never forgets, Lorraine. lol
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Sweet six. The green eyes stay with you:)
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I love haunting green eyes, Jo-Ann. Glad you came by. ๐
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Well done, Calisa. Great six. I love the line about memories and sandpaper over raw skin!
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I like that line too, Karyn. Thanks for stopping by.
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Oh, I love how you let us into his head. Fantastic six!!
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Thanks, Karen!
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Awesome 6, I loved this line especially: “Husky and soft, her voice dug into his head and dragged across his memories like sand paper over raw skin.” and then how he thinks what saying her name would do… great dip into his head!
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Hi Angela. Thanks for stopping by! I’m glad you liked it. I liked yours, too.
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Ohhhhh, love this!!!
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Great six. Love the sandpaper simile.
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Thank you, Paula. That’s actually one of my fave lines. It seems to say so much in so few words for me. ๐
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Excellent description in this. I love his reaction.
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I’m happy you like it, Joanne. Thanks for coming by!
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